This has real potential. Watching it, I kept wondering what it might've looked like with a bit of mentorship or just more time to fully develop the idea.
The story choice isn't the issue - it's obviously rooted in fact, and your interest in the subject comes through. But the way it's presented feels more like a reenactment than a deeper exploration. It ends up sitting in this in-between space - not quite historical, not fully personal.
That said - I want people making films like this. It's important that young creators are engaging with recent American history, even its darkest parts. But when it comes to something this well-known, the big question becomes: what are you bringing to it that we haven't seen before? If you're offering a new theory - go bold. If your angle comes from less-discussed or minority-sourced evidence, be specific. But don't remix half-defined ideas or rely on what the viewer already knows. You've got to guide us somewhere new.
One moment that really stood out - and not necessarily in a good way - was the opening scene. There's an actual photo of JonBenét Ramsey in the background, meant to pass as a relative in the shot. It's more immediately recognizable than the depiction of Ed Kemper, which pulled me out of the story right away. It felt unintentional, like the symbolism was working harder than the script. That kind of choice is a risk - it can come off powerful, or confusing. Here, it did the latter.
There's clearly a curiosity behind this project, and a willingness to engage with heavy subject matter. That's a strength. But next time, lean all the way in. Take creative risks you can defend. Be specific about your perspective. Show us why this story matters to you, and not just why it's shocking.
Looking forward to seeing what you make next - just don't hold back.
